Feedback Unit 5
Hello Brittany and Hope,
I really liked enjoyed the look and layout in your unit 5 webpage. I was glad to see that you discussed anxiety and depression in our young teen girls as we all know this to be a big problem today. I would have like to learn more about anxiety at the beginning of your page and to also have had a sort of introduction at the beginning explaining.
You mentioned in your first paragraph that with the progression of smartphones and the use of social media that it can be suspected that the numbers have increased of the adolescents showing signs of anxiety and depression. I was wondering if you came across any of that current data information? Also, I understand that the insurance companies make it difficult in patients receiving alternative treatment. What are the parameters that make the access to patients getting alternative treatment and is there other ways that they can acquire these services to in turn have them covered or reimbursed?
I was also a little confused by some of your cited sources such as "2017 National Health Interview Survey (NHIS) ", was reflecting mostly adult data not geared towards adolescents.
All five visual photos required were present along with two very informative videos. I did find the second video to be a bit long when viewing it.
There were a few punctuations and grammatical error within the page. recommendations as followed:
In the first paragraph sixth sentence "are" could be changed to "is".
Under the Advantages of Yoga Paragraph Below the bullet points:
Omit the comma after "symptoms," and add an "a" or "the" before "healthy".
In the fourth sentence "the " before "most".
And in the last paragraph, and the last sentence combine "in correct" to "incorrect".
Thanks for touching on this very delicate subject. We are almost at the stretch end!
Keep up the great work!
Erica
I really liked enjoyed the look and layout in your unit 5 webpage. I was glad to see that you discussed anxiety and depression in our young teen girls as we all know this to be a big problem today. I would have like to learn more about anxiety at the beginning of your page and to also have had a sort of introduction at the beginning explaining.
You mentioned in your first paragraph that with the progression of smartphones and the use of social media that it can be suspected that the numbers have increased of the adolescents showing signs of anxiety and depression. I was wondering if you came across any of that current data information? Also, I understand that the insurance companies make it difficult in patients receiving alternative treatment. What are the parameters that make the access to patients getting alternative treatment and is there other ways that they can acquire these services to in turn have them covered or reimbursed?
I was also a little confused by some of your cited sources such as "2017 National Health Interview Survey (NHIS) ", was reflecting mostly adult data not geared towards adolescents.
All five visual photos required were present along with two very informative videos. I did find the second video to be a bit long when viewing it.
There were a few punctuations and grammatical error within the page. recommendations as followed:
In the first paragraph sixth sentence "are" could be changed to "is".
Under the Advantages of Yoga Paragraph Below the bullet points:
Omit the comma after "symptoms," and add an "a" or "the" before "healthy".
In the fourth sentence "the " before "most".
And in the last paragraph, and the last sentence combine "in correct" to "incorrect".
Thanks for touching on this very delicate subject. We are almost at the stretch end!
Keep up the great work!
Erica
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